Homocide

response to Suicide another poem of mine

Not thinking to cleary, my focus revenge,

It's one less to take care of it's what god intends,

 

The pain that you caused me, pursued back to you,

Mentally degrading the things I've been through,

 

I try to refrain but the thought becomes loud,

I think to let him go but i am far too proud,

 

The anger so pure my decision now known,

I take his life then I give to him my own..

Author's Note

just a quick write

Reviews

[.]

that's a spine tingler..a mordid journey through a bitter mind..well said

[Wake Up!]

pretty good for a quick write(: i like it very much. as someone said earlier: "...chilling..."

[Bette]

good job

[Richard Williams]

Some chilling emotion here, pain and anger. Just the one spelling error, cleary.

[RonnieBreight]

This is interesting. "I take his life then give him my own." I wonder how you give a dead person life. For me this makes me think the murderer is killing this other person, and then giving the dead person his "life" and starting over. Only he isn't really giving him life, just unloading the life he's unhappy with on this person.
Haha maybe I'm completely off. Anyways, good job. :).

[Marie Harrison]

Brilliant, I like your lyrics.

[HorrorMaster]

Very good

[Matthew Kult]

Again great write. Love the short style. You say alot in a small amount.

regards,

Matthew

[Maurice]

A quick write that seethes with emotion.

[Brad]

oh how i've walked down that dark tunnel seeing red and tasting copper