Eternal Damnation

There was no moon

To move the clouds

To bring forth the thunder

To call forth the rain

Everything was asunder,

Whatever does she do

Without the energy

She's in need of

From the moon,

She falls prey

To the deities that tilt

Out of control

What comes around

Goes around

She feels she's losing her soul,

That's what happens when you dabble

With what you truly don't understand

You end up in eternal damnation

Within their unrelenting grasp.

Reviews

[Frieda P]

So often your writing gives pause to the looming picture that lies beneath. It captivates and is jarring in the same moment. 'Dabbling' can be a dangerous sport.

'You end up in eternal damnation
Within their unrelenting grasp.'

Okay, so that last line freaks me out.

Dark and foreboding. Good read.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you very much

[A Soapy Mess Stories]

Such emotion in these words....gave me something to think about....

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you

[David Scott]

You provide a good warning here. I enjoyed the poetic opinion. However, eternal damnation only comes from a conscious choice. Always in the darkest moments we have the clarity to choose... Just my opinion.
Enjoyed your poetry.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you :)

[Jordan's Back]

Eerie and mysterious, Excellent work

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you :)

[Jordan's Back]

Your welcome

[Pax]

karma and fate takes its leap
for i guess you have played something that you dont fully understand yet...
Darkly written piece...

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you

[quinfinn]

i got a feeling someone played alone with the ouija board recently, careful what you summon forth when you play with things you don't understand. i love this write!

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you so much. Now that you mention it...I did do that when I was young and the outcome was not good.

[quinfinn]

ooh, you send chills up my spine

[Tarry Franck]

I'll have to explain to you one day through messages :)

[quinfinn]

as you wish, i'm here often

[Tarry Franck]

:)

[Lover Of Words]

Again i am in awe! You surely know how too make each and every write amazing.. this one is one of my many many favorites Well done

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you :)

[Lover Of Words]

1Your welcome :)

[Tarry Franck]

Thank for helping me with it :)

[Lover Of Words]

Its what I do :))) You are quite welcome Thanks for asking