Drifting Away

I feel like I'm dying inside

My love for life

Is drifting away

And I'm finding it difficult to stay,

I'm mentally struggling

The blood flows freely

By my own hand

What do I do

How do I make a stand,

How do I stop the struggle

From consuming my judgment

My sound mind

To keep myself above ground

Free of life's crime.

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Beautifully honest write. I have felt this way, I think many have. The feeling that a part of you is dying and you don't know whether to curl up in a ball or scream. Times like these, I go down to the beach at night and walk the shores; sometimes I even scream into the ocean. It's a good stress relief. It will get better, though. Well written piece, I really enjoyed it.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you so much and I believe I will take your advice and go scream near the shore.

[A Soapy Mess Stories]

Once again you captured my feelings perfectly! :-)

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you - and again I say I am amazed by our connection. Twin souls possibly ;)

[A Soapy Mess Stories]

Hmmmmmmmmm....possibly!

[Frieda P]

Dark place Tarry, no review here, just compassion for your plight, hang in there my friend. xo

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you for being there for my my dear, dear friend

[Blotter]

The dark ruins of ones own life are the most fertile ground for the poet. Keep digging, your harvest is rich.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you my friend

[Blotter]

I will say this: at my darkest I blocked windows with heavy paper, sealed the doors to my sleeping room with foam strips and made so dark my hole that (in all seriousness) light seeped through the walls from adjoining rooms. I reveled in my personal sorrow, and I wrote like a sailor swears or a drunk drinks. The goal is to look over that deep abyss and not succumb. Stare into the hole of your own soul and use it as fuel to power through the very worst. Many have trod this ground before you, but none have made your journey; that alone is unique to you. Godspeed.

[Tarry Franck]

I can't thank you enough for writing this to me. You have truly helped more than you know. It's very much appreciated.

[CecilA]

Tarry,

Fantastic conceptual write. The people taken prisoner during Hitler's 'Final Solution' in Germany surely experienced this 'Drifting Away' concept you have so brilliantly portrayed in your poem. I believe they kept themselves above ground by focusing on one positive thought/hope each day. Consider that they were stripped of everything: (family) including spouses, children, parents, siblings; (clothing) including every garment; (hair) cleanly shaven; (possessions) everything you ever had was taken; (food) you were to work until you died; (water) no water to drink or for bathing; (social life) no socializing allowed; (health care) wasn't required - you were there to die; (religion) not allowed; (criminal justice) you were considered less than human, an enemy of the state, you weren't entitled to justice; (suicide) no way out on your own, you would be shot, beaten to death, gassed, but you had no right to take your own life because it wasn't yours to take; (shelter) unnecessary winter or summer. Otherwise I believe they would have succumbed because the Nazi Camp Guards sought out such persons to prove that they were inferior humans and deserved to die. We are so blessed to have the privilege of life, food, water, justice, shelter, friends, family, opportunity, love, hope, God and yes, we can take our own life. But why die when there's so much to live for. Compare our lives to those of the Jews, Gypsies, Mentally or physically handicapped, Homosexuals, and others the Nazi's considered undesirable and we have it made in this life. Everyday is an excuse to wake up in the morning and be happy just to be alive; to be allowed to live. Is there any of this data that you might incorporate into your poem as an alternative to suicide? Thanks for sharing this well thought out and written poem. Frightening to consider when there's so much to live for.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you for this wonderful review - you have given me so much to think of and to be thankful for - at the time I was not in the right frame of mind obviously. Thank you so much my dear friend.

[Lover Of Words]

this is good.. But as i have told you and i will continue to tell you letting go is not the answer you have to be strong as i know you can be and you dont just have me to help you you have alot of people that love you.. Drifting is not the answer my dear Great piece but stay strong as i know you can and i will be here for you at any time of the day or night Keep your head up love

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you dear

[Lover Of Words]

Your very welcome

[Sami Khalil]

"How do I stop the struggle

From consuming my judgment

My sound mind

To keep myself above ground

Free of life's crime."
A very good poem and those are my favorite lines...:)

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you dear so very much

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)

[Tarry Franck]

:)

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)

[quinfinn]

life just gets to us sometimes. you pen that well in this verse...i hope this is purely a fantasy piece...it is too convincing not to raise concern. very good write!

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you for your concern

[quinfinn]

i am always concerned where friends are in trouble....