Achilles Heart

I stand before you humbled at best 
my heart in disarray 
my love for you fully professed 

I give to you from open chest 
and in your trust I lay 
I stand before you humbled at best 

for with your love i am blessed 
in my heart you will always stay 
my love for you fully professed 

your true beauty needs caressed 
and never shall i betray 
I stand before you humbled at best 

and if I folly in my quest 
then I do not wish another day 
my love for you fully professed 

before God I have confessed 
if you do not love me i acquiesce 
I stand before you humbled at best 
my love for you fully professed

Reviews

[Nisreen]

I find this confession
truly honest

The style and the way your words just naturally come to life
Its romantic

[terry smith]

thank you!!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i don't really deal with form so much...and like andrew...not familiar enough to critique the form itself...but i do really like the smooth way this rolls off the tongue...

j.

[andrew mitchell]

Nice write Terry I'm not familiar with this style but the repetition works very well

[terry smith]

thanks...that is the key:)

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It's both scary and spacious to be open. This is a intimate, hopeful and sweet invitation for love, Terry.

[terry smith]

thanks Lynn..the style is called villanelle ...just wanted to see if i could pull one off :)