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Drink less thesaurus, she said in whiskey whispers

Pretty little vapid curves
Form the comely and extraneous words
That sob teardrops onto supercilious silicon boards
So that my reticent psyche will grow quiet
My animus has dressed up her Sunday best

Belie my glassy doe-eyes and elucidate my pretension
A kinship of validation and hollowed advocacy
Kindly, graciously, touch my trifles
For they clandestinely crave conformed and corpulent catharsis
My impetuous repugnance come manifest

When ironic light strikes blind nerves
So carapacial syllables seem over-significant
My heartsoul begs for comprehension and companion
Though my prose obfuscates a desperate hunt of beauty
And I retreat to darkness for exigent rest

Author's Note

K, well, just let me know what you think and don't be too harsh lol, I want to hear ure opinion dont be rude.

...

I need to drink less.

Reviews

[Miquel_Sanchez]

I'm not a massive fan of serious poetry (I blame my teachers for forcing Keats etc. on me).

In this case though I'll happily make an exception.

Excellent use of vocabulary, and words which apply well. You do often see people using complicated words simply to make their work 'appear' more genuine, this poem however can not be classed as such.

I give this 2 thumbs up for being both engaging and intruiging.

[_mal]

I always come back, this is one of your best I think

[tekphobik]

Thanks. I'm working on impressing you.

[masqued_muse]

To review your poetry, it is awesome that others have to grab the dictionary to be embrace the new. Learning is a gift.
To review your introspection....yes. You prolly need to drink less. HEY!! I am a Grandmother!! I can say these things....(lawl). lighten up...
masqued_muse

[Chris]

I cannot describe how I feel about this one, although I know its good.
Keep it up. :]

[Emily B]

you've got some elegant words there, and curiously, something about it is compelling . . . it has a certain something

[Shiningwolf]

Well I agree with _mal, had to break out the good old dictionary for this one. But I loved the poem! Very engaging!

[_mal]

Spent the time reading this with a dictionary and loved it anyway.

[Hello, Goodbye]

I love the eccentricity in your word usage.. It is curiously creative and entirely engaging..