Asunder

I felt like kissing you but the sky was so far

Night smoked tired clouds …

Suddenly waned your star.

Under the cover of darkness I lay, smelling the rye

Black kites flew above, made trees whisper and sigh…

I thought I was carcass, perfect savory flash

Gentle wind kissed my curls,

Plaiting them with your ash.

You were sad music

Louder than thunder

When the lightning split my heart asunder…

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the word "Asunder." First time I have heard this word. The poem was direct and honest thoughts. The strong description gave meaning to the title of the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Mariam]

Thanks for your kind review, Coyote!

[Nevtry]

I like the poem and the last line is perfect.

[Nevtry]

Sorry - I didn't mean to comment as a reply.

[Mariam]

thank you for stopping by)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

this is amazing the rhyming was fantastic, the way the poem flowed was great. I really enjoyed this read my favorite so far by far. Very deep, romantic and sweet write.

[Mariam]

thanks for stopping by! Happy you like it

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

your most welcome :)

[lawrence bear]

I liked the last part as well,

[Mariam]

thanks for stopping by)

[Sami Khalil]

"Gentle wind kissed my curls,
Plaiting them with your ash.
You were sad music
Louder than thunder
When the lightning split my heart asunder…"
I like this one. It is different from all your writes I guess...:)

[Mariam]

Glad that you like:) yes a bit different, felt like this tonight...Thanks for stopping by.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)