Hurry

Unfair games above your flames,

The weapon aims at holy blames.

Hurry!

Show me that one who claims

To be my God…

 

 

Reviews

[Missphit]

This poem could be interpreted in so many ways yet you keep it so simple the mind could wander for hours. That is what really makes a great piece!
Something you can read in a minute but possesses you for hours. I love your rhyming, it was top notch and the way you sway your words like wind through leaves that could blow one way yet another is pristine ability.
Bravo

[Irenic]

the first two lines are thumbs up. in five sentences you have demonstrated the reality. you are right we fight on religion basis and we can not tolerate if some one says wrong about our religion.
Show me that one who claims
To be my God…
these lines are different but i like them very much.
you write poems beautifully. you will become well known poet in future.
Keep writing.

[Neon]

Ha! An unique way to elaborate the truth of the life ... I liked this short piece. You should write something more on it. It's a wonderful and a realistic theme to work on.

[Mariam]

thanks for stopping by! Glad that you like and welcome to my page :)

[sayed Mudasir Ali]

Its been years I haven't read such stuff and I am delight by your lovely lines. I can't express my feelings for this wonderful inspiring poem. Thank you so much dear for sharing with us,Keep writing my lovely.

[Mariam]

Thanks for your kind review

[bobc]

M...I like this. Short with a healthy scepticism. Thanx...bobc

[Mariam]

Glad that you like, thanks for stopping by!

[Sami Khalil]

I know I'm your friend not your God if that is ok. A splendid read and write...:)

[Mariam]

Thanks for stopping by,my friend :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)