Mirror

Another poem from The High Poet

 

Mirror

 

So much hurt, too hard to bear

With my head down on my chair

Hide it well with a smile

Always have to wait a while

It's too hard to live like this

Always hiding behind my bliss

Sadness engulfs every ounce of my being

Everyone sees me but are they really seeing?

The Pain I hide and hold so dear

Try not to look at myself in the mirror

For if I do, I don't like what I see

The man in the mirror staring back at me

Author's Note

Another dark rhyme

Reviews

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... it's beautiful ... the lines are simple yet electrifying ... one feels like one is caught between the devil and the deep sea ... can't express and can't suppress ... you do a brilliant job of depicting that with such ease and skill ... this is an amazing verse ... i'll always remember it ...

[Hisou_Tenshi]

It's a very good poem. Very expressing. I like the line, "Sadness engulfs every ounce of my being". It's very descriptive. What more can I say though? Not much but that I have felt the same way.

[♍ Kirstin ♎]

I'll agree in saying that this is good but maybe you could add to the effect by using a bit more punctuation?

[topsyturvy]

I loved the flow of this, it sounds so hmm, can't think of another word but.. Suave. It's just so smooth even though it's a sad poem, I really liked it alot ^^

[mae-mae<3]

i loversome this. wonderfully, beautifully written.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is such a beautiful and descriptive piece of writing, very well penned!

[Aldora Sparrow]

Wow. I got goosebumps while I read this. The dark beauty of it shocked me, caught me off guard (which seemed to make it more effective). As Serah said, it's "can't express and can't suppress." Wonderful work. Keep it up!

[lamia]

the rhyming is good , good flow in the piece that kept me reading , it's simple and beautiful "For if I do, I don't like what I see
The man in the mirror staring back at me"
it's my favourite part because we all have that feeling sometimes , so good job , this is beautiful

[Bennett Logan]

As you know, I don't do one or two word reviews, so I apologize ahead of time. I believe I've suggested this before, but I'd like to see what this would read like without being confined by a rhyme scheme. If you're considering any kind of revision, I'd be interested in seeing your imagination run wild with this one. What does the man in the mirror look like? Is it really you, or is it just what others see? What's the mirror look like? Where are you? How does it all affect your reflection? Just a few ideas... Otherwise, I really enjoyed reading this poem. It's extremely personal and introspecive, but it still applies to anyone who reads it. Good stuff indeed, my friend! Have a good one.

[S.W.]

This really touched me and i think it can relate to so many different people in different ways. Really amazing and really enjoyed it even after the 4th time :)

[Ryan Falzon - Tymon]

Wow..very beautiful!