funeral

this will be my first and only entry.

you will never know
what could have been
what should have been
what only existed in my dreams
the ones you wove
I imagine

I can hear your laughter still
as I peer over my shoulder
behind me
to you
and I want to rush back to your arms
only
you don't want me to

I can't tell you anymore
I can't feel anymore
and I fear
that this is the last of my ink

you never believed how I love you

it grieves me so to say
this is my farewell performance
that your eyes shall never upon feast
and for this
I shall forever grieve

Reviews

[Tai-San]

This is so sad. good, but sad.

[emmajoy]

This hurts, still hurts, always will.

[emmajoy]

This hurts, hurts so much.

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this is painful and so very sad. Extremely well written with excellent form, but still, full of regret and despair.

To make a reader feel emotions, such as these, with your work, is completely outstanding!

Brava!

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very powerful and poignant...makes me sad..perhaps you shouldn't give up

[Ari]

Even if the intended didn't see this, I have seen it, and it really produced some strong emotion in me. This is absolutely beautiful, and manages to dance just out of the reach of the standard cliches.

I hope that this isn't the last of your ink.

[Hotel Mornings]

I like that you didnt use standard images. the lines: "and I fear//that this is the last of my ink" are awesome. It's an interesting image to use but it makes sense and original.

[Mysty Rayn]

Very touching. I liked this very much.