Prolonged Desire

The absence is terrifying
but more so is indifference.
Your voice so telling -
Humored not by conversation.
I know your precious vacancy craves not
an intercourse of words -
for they can solace ear
but cannot fondle.
You don't wait for my call anymore.
I hear you fading
but I beg of you
to please not tire of me.
I will never fold.

Reviews

[DIVYA]

This is the most depressing part of love and life, when a loved one just is not into us any more. I loved -
You don't wait for my call anymore.
I hear you fading
but I beg of you
to please not tire of me.
I will never fold.
100/100 for such a bang on potrayal of the desperation of dying love...
Regards, DN

[thenakedverse]

thank you so much!

[Kaela]

Nothing worse that the fear of being the phone call or text that becomes ignored.

[David Scott]

How indeed do we keep the desire strong and our relationships intimate? Your work is uplifting. Honest and intimate as well.
Enjoyed this poem.
Be well.

[Eagle Cruagh]

Your begging flows with equanimity.
You beg for him not to tire of you,
You mean he is not tired now ?
Indifference is terrifying --- yes .
You know, indifference to him would
work as well.
Oh, well, it is faultlessly constructed.
Good Luck.
----- Eagle Cruagh

[thenakedverse]

i am never indifferent in love. :/ i wish i was.itd be so much easier

[Eagle Cruagh]

I knw you are a lover, it said so in your poem----Course that`s just
my loose interpretation. God only knows what you reall said.

[Damien Davison]

Another beautiful poem, it seems you effortlessly let your flow just flow, writing down what you feel inside. I love your use of words and the way you form your thoughts. Great stuff!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

desirous not just of touch but of a passion created by words...nothing worse than indifference...
had that happen in several relationships...the initial excitement wears off..the physical attraction wanes a bit and we find out there is nothing else to the relationship....at least on one side or the other.

how sad it is...

when just a reassuring voice could comfort us.

i am in a long distance relationship....and words are all we have most of the time.

nicely penned.

sorry i am not more helpful as a critic...but i don't tear poems apart just to have something to say...if i like them i like them...and yours ..i like. as they are.

jacob

[soliloquy]

This is sweetly written about a situation so sad.