On Potter's Wheel

==== On Potter’s Wheel====

copyright@ pushkar prabhat, 2014

Hollow;

Irregular, dump of mud;

On a wheel, rotating.

 

Waiting:

 

Waiting, for your touch;

Some pressure, here, there;

At just, the right places.

 

Waiting, to be moulded;

 Take form, shape;

Evolve into someone/something.

 

Waiting, to be filled;

With thoughts, opinion;

Emotions you own, to reciprocate.

 

BUT.

Touch me not just yet.

Remember: i will be what you make.

          i will be what you shall, fill.

Remember: My character will be your intentions.

          My actions will be your needs.

i am not a monster,

Or a fairy,

Neither a vessel: Empty or full of poison.

Atleast not yet.

 

i am just:

Hollow;

Irregular, dump of mud;

On a wheel, rotating.

So touch me not, just yet.

Reviews

[MomzillaNC]

Interesting commentary on how our lives take shape.

NOTES: It's "potter"
The personal pronoun "I" is always capitalized. That said, I have seen it used in small caps deliberately to denote a feeling of smallness or faded narrator in poetry. However, you're poem doesn't have that sense of loss or being marginalized.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much........yes it is potter, my bad.
about the 'i', the mud is formless and has no value through out the poem so i think it should be small caps.
apart from this, though i know it's grammatically incorrect but i like using small caps 'i' and i do use them deliberately. i don't know why, maybe the muffin man knows! lol [don't be angry]

[MomzillaNC]

LOL… it's your poetic voice.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

ya......something like that! i don't know.

[MomzillaNC]

. . . . . . :D

[Penny]

You know.. it sounds so magical and lyrical too when you read it in a certain way and the best part about this piece is that it can be interpreted in many ways. Amzing write. Thanks for sharing.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much Penny.........long time..... glad to see you are back!!!

[Penny]

Yes.. was kind of busy. Pleasured to have read your work again

[Pushkar Prabhat]

well good that you are free now. and the pleasure is mine!! :)

[Confuser]

I enjoyed it. I had to let it simmer a few moments. I really liked it and do not know why I was hung up on dump of mud; it is a great metaphor for life/love friendship; anything, to be transformed and changed. That is what we do. Right? I was writing about a ferris wheel this am; maybe that crept in. Thank you.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much for this kind review!!!! :) :)

[Confuser]

I thought about this later, think I simply loved the suspense. I didn't want to know/see the potters' wheel. How silly. I liked it.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

no pressure........but it is fascinating, you might like that too!!! :p

[Christine]

Mmm, would quite like to delve into this pot myself. Or maybe let myself be the pot. To be the pot and the potter. Great stuff.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Thank you so much for you appreciation.......:) :)

[Luke]

to be honest might just take a pottery class after this. besides a couple grammatical mistakes this was a enjoyable read. well done and you should continue writing

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much for your time and please be so kind to point out the mistakes........i would really appreciate it! thanks a bunch! :) :)

[Dipanjan Dutta]

The relation to how our lives unfurl is quite impressive. I do like the style, the breaks, "waiting" and "but"...great one Pushkar...I loved it

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much for this kind review..........glad you loved it!! :) :)

[Nikki]

molded* Other wise, it was a fun journey and not gonna lie, it made me want to make something. :) Sounds so fun and the picture you put with it just makes it all the more inviting! It can be anything. That's truly special.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

moulded=molded, it's the british-american thing.
thank you for the kind review......... :) :)

[Nikki]

Gotcha like colour and color. I spell it colour myself, understood. Then, let me edited. It was awesome as is. :) You're welcome.

[Nikki]

edit it* Rather.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

.........................:D :)

[Pryde Foltz]

Wonderful … you know something of the spirit and man. Brilliant:)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much for this kind visit and generous review.......... :) :)

[ayesha gupta]

amazing thoughts. brilliant work. i liked reading it.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much...... :) :)

[Gurleen Saluja]

Remember: i will be what you make.
i will be what you shall, fill.
Remember: My character will be your intentions.
My actions will be your needs.

The best part. comparable to life, relates to how humans mould themselves.
Thanks for sharing. :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome!! thank you for reading and appreciating!! Have a great day!!
:) ;)

[Gurleen Saluja]

You're welcome :)

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

I think this piece is interesting because depending on your relationship with art and artists it can really be taken in so many more ways than just life and sculpting, which are both great meanings with messages very well done, but it can also be so much more than that which really, I love. Well penned.

"Touch me not just yet.
Remember: i will be what you make.
i will be what you shall, fill.
Remember: My character will be your intentions.
My actions will be your needs."

^These are the lines that stood out the most to me.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

wow! thanks a lot for this kind visit and amazing review. It made my day. Thank you so much. :) :)