On Potter's Wheel

==== On Potter’s Wheel====

copyright@ pushkar prabhat, 2014

Hollow;

Irregular, dump of mud;

On a wheel, rotating.

 

Waiting:

 

Waiting, for your touch;

Some pressure, here, there;

At just, the right places.

 

Waiting, to be moulded;

 Take form, shape;

Evolve into someone/something.

 

Waiting, to be filled;

With thoughts, opinion;

Emotions you own, to reciprocate.

 

BUT.

Touch me not just yet.

Remember: i will be what you make.

          i will be what you shall, fill.

Remember: My character will be your intentions.

          My actions will be your needs.

i am not a monster,

Or a fairy,

Neither a vessel: Empty or full of poison.

Atleast not yet.

 

i am just:

Hollow;

Irregular, dump of mud;

On a wheel, rotating.

So touch me not, just yet.

Reviews

[MomzillaNC]

Interesting commentary on how our lives take shape.

NOTES: It's "potter"
The personal pronoun "I" is always capitalized. That said, I have seen it used in small caps deliberately to denote a feeling of smallness or faded narrator in poetry. However, you're poem doesn't have that sense of loss or being marginalized.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much........yes it is potter, my bad.
about the 'i', the mud is formless and has no value through out the poem so i think it should be small caps.
apart from this, though i know it's grammatically incorrect but i like using small caps 'i' and i do use them deliberately. i don't know why, maybe the muffin man knows! lol [don't be angry]

[MomzillaNC]

LOL… it's your poetic voice.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

ya......something like that! i don't know.

[MomzillaNC]

. . . . . . :D

[hardeep sabharwal]

What an interesting write on the shapes that actually life gives us,
nice to read such a piece,, good job

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thanks a lot. :)

[Sindu]

The entity of its own before it takes a form away from that all. That was engaging portrayal of us puny humans :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thanks a bunch Sindu!!! :) :)

[Sindu]

You're welcome.

[AprilRN1210]

I like the fragmented thought in this one.. it filled just the right....spaces... then left teases to the imagination.. it was creative, clever, and thought provoking.. brilliant use of metaphor to hint at deeper meaning.. relationships require knowing what you want and each working together to get it to work the way it should.. it takes patience, care, tenderness, and attention to your wants and needs as well as theirs.. I really enjoyed this.. good job!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much for this wonderful, insightful review. it means a lot. :) :)

[Sami Khalil]

"i am just:
Hollow;
Irregular, dump of mud;
On a wheel, rotating.
So touch me not, just yet."

a marvelous poem and execution. You mold your poems as that of a potter. Bravo...................

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much sami......your reviews means a lot to me! :) :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).............

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

i am just:

Hollow;

Irregular, dump of mud;

On a wheel, rotating.

So touch me not, just yet.




I thought of the potter and us being
the clay the vessel of God and than we get purged
of any impurities and we will have his Character his love
in our hearts and love those that hate and his meekness
humbleness.



that is what I saw when I read this it was quite Lovely
thank you for sharing I saw MomzillaNC give a review
and came and took a look.



thank you for sharing Blessings. Benita

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much for this kind visit and an amazing review. :) :)

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're welcome. I really enjoyed reading this I hope to read more of your work again. have a blessed day. Benita

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Sure i would love that! have a great day. :)