====Kaleidoscopic Psychosis====

====Kaleidoscopic Psychosis====

copyright@pushkar prabhat, 21-05-2015

 

Psychosis is maybe just a symptom.
Ugliness of this truth can't be washed off.
So you'd think of it as a mystery
Having one characterized history.
Kaleidoscopes are just apex and trough,
Aren't we supposed to live on the system 
Replicating each and every symptom.

Psychosis is maybe just a symptom.
Repercussions are just ’the’ intended 
Albeit not the truth but comforting.
Blame yourself if strangers are indulging.
Haven't you been told how the old tales ended?
Aren't you supposed to follow ’the’ system!
Trailing away is in fact the symptom!

 

Author's Note

trying something different.........
highly derived from the sonnet form.......14 lines 10 syllables each......
though break it only into 2 verses with experimental rhyming scheme ABCCBAA ADEEDAA

please also comment on how successful this was, apart from the poem.......
also inform if this schematic already exists.......
one last thing........this was also acrostic, all first letters combined reads my name........great if you noticed!!!
thank you so much!

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Reviews

[R Smith]

excellent work Pushkar, i'm always in awe of anyone who can write to a format, guess i'm just a wildman poet, anything goes haha, here you have combined several formats and done so superbly if i may say, i love the acrostic spelling of your name and the sonnet forms are brilliantly executed, was this successful, a hundred times yes, a great poem for today, bravo :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!! thank you so much Sir................i like trying new things.......specially combining new with old.......i should frame this review............thank you so much Sir..........your confidence in me really motivates me............!!! :) :)

[R Smith]

you are always welcome Pushkar :)

[marcus]

I like this, awesome!! And original format.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Thanks a lot.......really appreciate it!!! :) :)

[~]

Hmmm prognosis and medicine that comes with it :D
"Psychosis is maybe just a symptom.
Repercussions are just ’the’ intended
Albeit not the truth but comforting." -- these stood out for me.
I like it when everyone tries new things, and you have done a great job my friend!! :D

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Thank you so much Skittles..............!!! :) :)

[Ashwin Thakur]

Great bhai
Mocking the system will make the system a suitable one
If they really want it
Aisehee likhte jaao bhai
Maaa Saraswati aapke haato mai sthaapeet haii......

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Arreee baap re.........itna mat chadhaao yaar...........but bahot dhanyawaad............acha lagta hai!!! :) :)

[Jeyanthi]

It is very intriguing to me. :D

i like the last line you left reader to depict the truth from overshadowed theory.
To me, psychosis is inherited gene from our ancestors, then we all are same. :P
(its really good to see that you experimenting new scheme, keep it coming.)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Thanks a lot ji.................really appreciate your kindness!!! :) :)

[Jeyanthi]

Pushkar maybe writing poems like this is also could be a symptom :P

[Pushkar Prabhat]

i am way past that line.................!!! :) :)

[Jeyanthi]

before, a little push from my part... :P