Oppurtunites to great, and rainbows faded to gray....

Far to good
To have last
Far to perfect
to not have passed
Far to fantastic
To have been real
far to amazing
for me to have been able
A passing dream
Like a crush's glance
with an unrealistic gleam
Like a hypnotist's trance
It lasts for awhile,
then slowly fades away
Leaving your world far to dull
And letting your rainbows fade to gray......

Reviews

[Stephen Scaggs]

Dear Writer,

Thank you for the read request. As I delve into the meat of this piece, it seems to me more prose than poetry. Like it's lyrical versus a poem. I see some repetition and rhyme which is good. And I like the increase in rhythm. It's relatively comfortable on the eyes to look at and creates a good sense of flow. If you work to put this into stanzas, I think it may help a bit more.
"Far to good
to have last.

Far to perfect
to not have passed." So on. Also, at the end of your poem, there is too many periods. Use only three. I think personally that the title of the poem is too long and should be cut down some. I did like the overall magnitude of this piece. Always aspire to be the best you can be! And I hope you and Gregory are doing great! :D 9.6/10.

Your Reader,
S. W. Scaggs

[Senseless whatever]

I've live(d) this, awesomeness!!!

Oh so true to life. You have the poetic voice of one that has been there, and yet your age says this can not be. True passion comes from within and not all that think they posses it actually do. You may just be one. Fantastic Job!!

[Sharkapillar]

you and your rainbows fading to gray lol
Fabulous poem, though, love. ^_^

[Gregory H.]

This is a sad poem...but flowed and ran really well...Nice job...

AA
Gregory...