Saving Daylight

How dare you rob me of my daylight?

You dare rob me of my daylight?

What more can you steal

And call it fate

My glorious Sun, glowing ball of heat

Finally one that shines

Brings radiance to the days

Did you know me in all the years

As one who enjoys returning in the pits of the night

Or have you not looked my way for a while

I already feel black shadows

Feasting on my soul, crawling within the skin

What is left to warm the withering self but Thee

Now I'll bet you want Her all to yourself

While musing upon my disdain as

I wake too late for my lovely Sunrise

He who thinks himself so clever

Yet I'll deem you foolish

You see, there's magic up my sleeve

Only if I turn the hour hand back

It will be quite clear

You'll not have bested me

Author's Note

An old man's nonsensical grumbles

Reviews

[Bluefire]

"to have shadows feasting upon my soul?"
"You see, there is this thing I can do, this magic I control that's hidden up my sleeve.
Let us just turn the hour hand back one and it will be clear that you have not bested me."
So filled with magic, retrieving what was lost from you and conquering your enemy.
Well done!

[Tai Ryens]

I feel that this is a poignant portrayal of an inner battle of depression and happiness, with metaphors each attributing to their appropriate role in the story. Your character desperately rewinds time to an era where happiness was easily felt, thus allowing the enemy to prepare for the future while you dilly dally in the past . . . Nostalgia is quite a double-edged sword. I feel that this foreshadows an event that happens in the future while your character is frolicking in the past . . . Well done, I say, it was quite thought-provoking.

[Avery]

Thanks for the thorough insight! It's great to hear what someone took out of a piece of work and how it came across to them. Your review was very thoughtful and may have taught me more about this piece than I even knew myself.

[Cloud Composer]

It sounds very poetic and emotional. See, you can write amazing poems when you put your mind to it. The speaker sounds almost eccentric; it's just too good~

[ZackOfBridge]

Amusing, playful, and beautifu. Sometimes the sun can be a real stinker.

[Avery]

haha thanks~ I'm happy you think so :)

[Vian]

Genius! I loved it. I was amused but also very deeply moved. The sunlight is a something so beautiful and powerful and you have very well captured the impact it has. I loved your almost humor of the piece too, all in all a very well blended work!

Thank you for writing.