Coming Clean

Dad

Never thought

We would connect

Through baseball.

A game

Which you came to

Late in life.

Through

My insistence

Of watching

And listening to

The Blue Jays

Play.

As

We rooted against

The "evil empire"

Of the New York Yankees

During the regular season

And their playoff drives.

So

Please forgive me

When I say

These words

Out loud.

Rather

Be watching

A baseball game

Any day of the week

Over hockey.

Know

For some

This is sacrilege

Of all things

Canadians.

But

I do not

Care.

Reviews

[Trigorin]

This is really not bad at all. The last two stanzas are very heartfelt and well-done, and while I do think some of your line breaks are a little choppy, overall this keeps the stakes very high and keeps the reader invested. Well done.

[therisa]

Thank you, Trigorin. May I ask, which of my line breaks are choppy? For future reference. therisa

[Trigorin]

Generally, the first two or three lines in each stanza. It breaks up the flow just a little too much for my taste.

[therisa]

Ok. It's just my writing style.