The Next Step

An expanded and edited version of my poetic response to WIllweb's poem, "Another dream". http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Willweb/1433954/

Another vision
Intertwined
With a tainted sense
Of nothingness.

Having been here
Once too many times
Facing this problem
That never goes away.

Wondering
Do I surrender
And admit
My shortcomings
Before you?

Hoping
This time
Everything will be
Different
Between us.

To reach
That impossible space
You say
I have locked you
On the outside

Without realizing it.

Maybe
But am scared
To do so.

Knowing
What awaits me
Shall this occur
Once more.
Between us.

And yet

Here

I stand before you

With my heart

In hand.

Offering it

To you

One more time.

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

I love what you have done with this collection. I was waiting for it. When I clicked on it earlier it wasn't finished.

[therisa]

Thank you, KL. Just thought, why not, so I did it.

[therisa]

KL, I figure, I got about 50 more poems, to go through and adding more, on a daily basis, for this such treatment.

[Matching Socks]

Very heartfelt piece here. Takes courage to show vulnerability.
Nice job sweetheart. :)

[therisa]

Thank you, Ana. The majority of my poems, deal with opening myself up, to others.

[Matching Socks]

It's a brave thing to do, I admire you for it.

[therisa]

Something, I have to do, if I want real healing, of my body and soul.

[willweb]

Nice Therisa. This had a little bit of everything...you have really opened up here and it was quite the read.

[therisa]

Thank you, Will, had your poem as inspiration.