Fabricated Faith

A death, a cry, a whisper, a tear

Oh Lord, please tell me are you truly here

We beg, we pray to see a better day

Oh Lord have you left us, or have you never been here

Your daughter, your son ,your neighbourhood friend

Blinded by the lies being fed to their open hands

Im born, I'm alive and I'm soon to die

Only to have lived a life created by lies.

Author's Note

*UNFINISHED*
This is just a draft, definitely needs a good clean up, but let me know what you think so far!!

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

It is a complete poem. You could add the who,why, when, where and how of the poem. Made a epic thoughts.
"Im born, I'm alive and I'm soon to die
Only to have lived a life created by lies."
The above lines above did say enough. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[The Shrew]

Oh wow, thank you very much !!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[AmberThePuppet]

Beautiful I should say.. I hope you have the answers to your questions illustrated in this poem

[Ryan Jaimz Knight]

Nicely summarizes many of the problems in the modern church.

[The Shrew]

Thank you!! Im glad this was communicated through the piece!

[Satan]

You definitely possess the eye Shrewmeister ;)

[The Shrew]

hahahah thanks

[Salem]

another great piece ,, keep the good work

[The Shrew]

Thanks!! :)

[Salem]

:) .......................

[Freedomwriter97]

This is very good and thought provoking. I also love its creative title

[The Shrew]

Thank you!!

[closed]

a really poetic message that seems to be centered on faith

the spiritual aspect really lends this poem weight

[The Shrew]

Thanks you!

[KeeD]

There is a resonating truth that keeps vibrating through these words. Each time I read it I feel my lungs fill in with a heavy weight that all is not what it seems to be. There are strings that hover above you, him, her, them and me.. I feel like a puppet held together by faith, what is the meaning of this faith, now that's what you've made me contemplate. Great write.

[The Shrew]

Thank you very much for the feedback! :)