Hole

some thoughts on my mind

                                       Hole

 

Its like I can’t fall asleep

I just keep on dreaming

It’s getting into my head

I can’t prevent this from happening

But at least I achieved something

 

 

I can’t do this thing

But I can make you satisfied

Under the sheets

Unfortunately there is no love

Yes I lied

 

All night I just keep wondering

Wondering if I will make it

I am getting lost but maybe that’s a good thing

Getting lost in a never-ending maze that’s the beauty of it

No it not what I thought no nothing alike

Its closer to a lightning strike

I was overwhelmed by what I saw

I know I still have to wait until its dawn

 

The day becomes a week

And now it’s clear you are so out of my league

I can’t count on you

And you owe me plenty too

What is this supposed to mean

You were the shoulder where I was supposed to lean

We both knew

It was too pretty to be true

With that clarified now

 

I want to hurt you so bad

But how?

How? Could you feel the pain I once felt?

I know I was wrong

I had, you had, and we had

What have you ever done wrong that would make me so mad?

Yes I have a drinking problem

And yes maybe I am was so wasted because of that  

 

I don’t have a heart

Only a hole

I wish it was easy to forget you

But you broke through my wall

And everything I had

I wish I already forgot that

But it was everything I ever had

Now it’s just a hole

 

And missing it makes it bigger than I ever could imagine

Bigger than I ever expected to be

Bigger than that hole

 

Author's Note

please tell me your opinion and if you see some grammar mistakes or just other mistakes please let me know i am a dutch girl and i am trying to improve my writing so thank you soon much Lots of Love xxx shy

Reviews

[Mayank]

I think poem and subject are very much clear, just punctuation is required so that reader can pause where you want them to. Overall, good one.

[theshygirl]

thank you so much !!! i know i have to work on my punctuation i am trying to

thank you again
shy

[wordman]

no it not what i thought,it`s only mistake i see the poem is great,the theme is clear
and you don`t sound shy to me,lol

[theshygirl]

Hahaha well you have never met me in real life so....i am really shy , i ALWAYS turn red infront of people or just get really shakey

[Jake Kokoris]

"And yes maybe I am was so wasted because of that "- You could keep "am" or "was", but not both.
Overall it seemed melancholy and personal. Nice job

[theshygirl]

thank you so much
i really need to check my poems again before i post them oops ...

[wordman]

well,i`m american and still cant spell lol great job