THE PHEONIX

a poem describe the mythological bird with great strength coming from the time of the unknown with abilities of a god and is called the pheonix

Out of time and out of space

An entity forges itself in place

From whence it came no one knows

A countenance of grandeur, continually grows

 

Such power to witness all eyes can see

The dreaded presence from a bird of prey

Pure flames of fire emerge with devastation

Searching to embrace new sensation

 

The power between good and evil

Rampant crush are the restraining rebel

Its presence laid waste to every level

Destructive force is the universal devil

 

Out of balance Out of control

This bird rec havoc from generation of old

To crush and creates without the will of faith

Such power to harness is very great

 

Perfectly uniformed in beauty and pride

Forever immortality a thousand times it died

Yet lived again

And continue to reign

 

The sound of an eagle echoes across the firmament

The mist of fire and magic to experience

Bird of deprivation

And Guardian of creation

 

Spawn by a crystal

With such power that is universal

Who is able to stand in the way?

Of a bird with fire stretched its wings across the milky way

 

To create with fire

And crush from its desire

Burn itself to death and reborn from the ashes

With extraordinary power that is quite emensive

 

Wings of magnificent

But fright to behold

Characteristically virulent

Unrealistically such power never foretold

 

Teleport itself through time and space

Because of its presence the solar laid waste

Power and might to encounter in all this

And the name of this bird is called the phoenix.

 

 

Author's Note

i have written this poem from fictional character entity called the pheonix which i have watched years ago inclusive of the xmen dark pheonix saga, please crittic

Reviews

[keymo]

thanks alot my dear as that is not my favourit piece, i called it fantasy expressing itself i metaphoric way

[Elizabeth Mars]

Very interesting piece! It is quite engaging and the lines individually are very solid and entrancing! The flow of the poem feels a bit off though, for example in the first paragraph, the first and second sentences ended with rhyming words "space" and "place", and the third and fourth sentences ended with rhyming words as well "knows" and "grows", however in the second paragraph, the first sentence and the second sentence did not end with rhyming words, "see" and "prey", while the third and fourth sentences ended with rhyming words, "devastation" and "sensation". While it is fine to mix in both rhyming and none rhyming sentences into your piece, this happens in your piece rather suddenly and randomly. But overall, this is a wonderfully intriguing piece, and quite hypnotic! I can't wait to see more work in the future! Great job!

[keymo]

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