You

I wrote this poem, and I was wondering if it's any good, so please let me know what you think. Also I want to know whether I made some grammar mistakes.

I wonder how, you do what you do.
I wonder how, you became you.
I wonder who, made you feel so very blue.
Can you feel the wind that made you fly, fly high.

If it meant that much to you, you would know why.
I know you are in pain, it is what you hide inside.
Never to be yourself.
Be a Man and shut yourself.

If you were honest, you would do what you do.
If you were honest, I would not be able to see through you.
I wonder how you can live with yourself.
Because I know I Am You.

Reviews

[GalaxyGhost]

Second verse, first word needs a simple edit. Other than that, I love the rhythm and flow of this poem! I also like the lesson that asks, 'are we being true to ourselves?' Keep on writing!

[Emily]

I love how you started it!
Keep on writing!