Alone, Burning

Haikus are not my strong suit.

Dawn touches her brow
Zucchini, silent lust grows
Smile, desire aches

Mattress whispers near
Fingers crawl electric lines
Breath cracks, deep sighs hum

Hands roam, feral, raw
Quiet pounded, moans and cries
Time drips, sticky dew

Eyes shut, heart’s ablaze
Nerves awake, raw, wet, engorged
Body hums fire

Shivers jolt, thighs hot
Lips part, screams stifled in throat
Alone, burning hum

Author's Note

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QzS2hIl5HOUwell.
Here is a link to a YouTube reading I did recently from my book, Aluminum Cowboys: Poems and Short Stories, available on Amazon. My other books are there as https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QzS2hIl5HOU

Reviews

[red93]

These are fine Thomas, but you still seem to be tied in to at least the idea of 5-7-5. If you try shorter lines and fewer words, I feel you will get better results. But still perfectly decent of course ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[Thomas W Case]

Thank you, my friend...Haikus are not really my wheelhouse.

[ETERNITY]

Zucchini...? It took me a minute. . or two...
The poem is actually romantic in a raw and burning way.
The final line got away from me.
Reading it a few times usually works.
Great impact in this poem!

[Thomas W Case]

Would you call it orgasmic? lol. Thank you. You're the best.

[ETERNITY]

Thomas W Case, Orgasmic? Absolutely!
The line, "alone, burning hum" ... Oh!
;) Awesome

[Thomas W Case]

lol...Thank you.