Last Rite

Do my words melt
before it hits the ground
Like snow of forgotten lore
Deep in my thoughts
Robert siad a wagon
Would be my doom
Before I take my sleep
Yet I write when wrong
And never when right
But time has passed
And so has frost
As cold it may be
I find peace
In that I believe
But never true
Yet I still write
Finding my words
Will ever loom
Not in a cart
like so many
Yet I will in my right
From my heart
Write that,
What is deep

Reviews

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Mauricio… it is amazing how we have Poetic Instincts as though digging for Gold… Rhymes can be 🧙‍♀️ Magical… out of the Blue!! Perhaps it will be “Our Claim to Fame” Amen.. Pat

[Patricia Wedel]

Deep thoughts are like Snow Storms with thunder and lightening to awaken our Hearts to Faith, Hope, and Charity. Amen.. Pat

[Mauricio Montoya]

What I wrote had nothing to with God or faith but yes hope, I think that's why many of us write, what we believe, right or wrong.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts, I guess somewhere God plays a part it this. But I what I wrote at the time is what I felt.Amen.
Again thank you

[Mauricio Montoya]

Hey thank you for reading

[Rafia Anjum]

the poem is filled with simple but effective sense anybody can understand the essence of the poem easily.
well written.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts

[Rafia Anjum]

pleasure of mine

[Kelly Scheppers]

What is deep within you will always find a way to express itself. Sometimes, all it takes is a little nurturing, a little time to refresh and revitalize the senses. Good things come to those who wait!

[Mauricio Montoya]

Thank you, you're right.

[Pete]

liked the analogies of products of cold. honest thoughts and feelings. that which is straight from the heart is worth its weight in gold. keep it up ... :_

[Mauricio Montoya]

WOW,, thank you,it's a good way to put it

[Chris Shaw]

Happy new year Mauricio. May you continue to write what is in your heart. A writer is compelled. The words just have to reach the page. There is never a right or wrong time.

Chris

[Lydia Shutter]

We need to write....it is our calling. Interesting poem here. If writing brings you peace, continue and be happy. Lydi*

[Mauricio Montoya]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts

[Soren]

I'm glad that it was not last write but last Rite, am I right? I liked this poem in its playfulness. Very nicer

[Mauricio Montoya]

You see what you write, never think what you write is right can be wrong, I read before u say I write because I believe before I die because Truth outlives lies.

[Chris Shaw]

You write because you are compelled to write. Us writers need no excuse, it is in our blood.

Chris

[Mauricio Montoya]

Yes Chris, it's in our blood, you know what's funny I drop out of school and don't spell very good but I love to write.
Thank you for dropping by and sharing you thoughts.

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome :)

[Miss Sharon]

What an awesome write! I love it from start to finish. ~Sharon

[Mauricio Montoya]

There many good writes on this site, one day I will write something that will reflect what we have inside, thank you for reading and touching my heart.