just a thought

Peaceful

Stillborn my thoughts
Dead on arrival
Where my heart beats
I hear nobody scream
I believe in forgotten lore
That we are free
But blinded
In a conner
What'
we will never find
Because
What we have inside.
When we beat the drum.
Is to be free.

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

You bring out your point about freedom (from birth) is important; however how you express these thoughts is really the "meat" in the poem.... well done!
Best, B

[Mauricio Montoya]

thank you for dropping by to read and your input, its been awhile since I've been to the site so i need to do some reading, lol thank you for sharing your thoughts.

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome Mauricio
Warmly, B

[Dave Brown]

Yes. without freedom we may as well have been stillborn
Buenos Dios Amigo
Hasta la Vista

[Mauricio Montoya]

Gracias mi amigo libreta es todo.
alrato

[Ken Simm.]

An excellent use of words and language. About the freedom to use these things. Excellent.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Thanks like the horse yeah thanks for dropping by, reading I had mix up two lines it should read, Where my heart beats
I hear nobody sream,
Thank you for sharing your thoughts but I got to fix to make right,