Goodbye, For Now

Prose Poetry

In that last moment, when frailty begets clarity, what is truth becomes true for the first time and only. Senses fail, and the flesh betrays, but the heart of all things beats. We dance in the futile, grasping to the real, longing for all the shimmers.

Reviews

[BBP]

You have a way with spitting truth but keeping it polished in such a small package.

Well done.

[tim.reed]

Thank you! I enjoy your feedback.

[Inda]

"for the first time and only time"
this line is a bit awkward for me, maybe for the first and only time might work; unless u mean to repeat the word time for purpose of tone.
nonetheless another great write, i like your style of prose, you have a unique voice.

[tim.reed]

I did mean to repeat, but not for tone. I wanted to slow down the ready to enhance the finality of it all. Thank you for the feedback. You've been very helpful!

[Najam Us Saher]

Very descriptive. I really liked it.

[tim.reed]

Thank you!

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome. ☺

[Shweta]

These short few lines conveys the bond so beautifully...lovely use of words..

[tim.reed]

Thank you!

[tim.reed]

Can I get some feedback on my poems? I would be happy to reciprocate!