Empty Room

when you thought love would stay forever...

The room is empty

But I can feel your suffering here

I can hear your tears hitting skin rolling to floor

I can feel your sorrow here

 

The room is empty

But I can smell your anguish here

I can hear salty smeared mascara crusting over on your cheeks

I can smell your torment here

 

The room is empty

But I can taste your terror here

I can hear heavy exhales throbbing through your oxygen

I can taste your misery here

 

I see your suffocation in an empty room

You once thought was full

Of love

Reviews

[Moon]

Such depth and emotions! This is sad, but it really touches the reader. Great write Tinasha!

[Tinasha LaRayé]

thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts!

[Moon]

You are welcome :)

[Rob Santana]

This is deep!!! Passionate and very touching. Creative write, love it.

[Tinasha LaRayé]

wow - thanks so much for reading and your kind words!

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is a very sad and dark piece.Sometimes we are so sad and all alone.Is there supposed to be the word "the" in the third line or did you write it this way?I really liked:P

[Tinasha LaRayé]

Thanks for reading and reviewing! I'm so glad you liked it! I don't see where you mean the word "the" - there are three "the's" at the start of the first 3 stanzas - and these are all intentional :o)

[Vidya Bacchus]

The third line "I can hear your tears hitting skin rolling to floor " There I was wondering if it was supposed to be"rolling to THE floor" or did you write it this way?You are welcome you are a very good writer keep writing:)

[Tinasha LaRayé]

Oh - yes! I did mean to write it that way. By making me take a second look at it - you've given me an idea for a revision. Thanks for the review, your kind words and the inspiration! :o)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome,glad to help:)