tragic drop

..cold summer...

my heart is melting
as rain does in every fall
drowned in tragedy.

Author's Note

..I wanna hear your thoughts
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Reviews

[MOON]

Poignant write very good

[Pax]

sadness speaks throughout such short poem. nice

[Barbara Walker]

I can see the metaphor you were thinking of, but I don't correlate rain melting with drowned. That was my first immediate thought. However, reading it, again, I do like the line drowned in tragedy!...snow melts...

[shunik]

haha
thanks
=]

[Coyote Poetry]

You said a lot in so few words. Using rain to make tragedy have purpose was very good . Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[shunik]

thank you sir
=]

[GunMetal]

Heartbeat frequencies,
patterned sidewalk water marks,
and thoughts of thawing.

[GunMetal]

Those are my thoughts. =)
Nice work.

[shunik]

..yes, it coincide with heartaches actually
thanks
=]

[Seanne Tholltree]

nice shortly craft..

[Fréyjä Helv..]

I think it's nice... Though I've heard the phrase so many times that I've quite felt numb to the thought of it. Maybe others would feel its intensity. But not me. Sorry.. But nice work..

[Melody]

This is lovely! Very thoughtful and emotional. I love that picture, too! I'm personally not a big fan of haiku's but this is just lovely! Great job!

[Serenity Faith]

a powerful sadness in only a few words.

[shunik]

;p
t.y

[Marie]

An senyru (I think)...very good...