….LINGER...

Through the windows I see lots of mystery,

As the rain was fallin’ my heart was fillin’ with love,

The words my mind keep on singing..

Oh! Every beat seems hanging on..

Collides to my soul makes me wonder..

How could I ever be so obsessed?..

To the world I knew can’t resist.

Eternal passion from the unknowing..

And then my kryptonite was found!..

Bestowed upon me with desire,

Surrounded me in solitude.

I think I’m in love?!..

Crept shouts of real tune…

I think I’m in love!!!..

Every whip becomes beat….

I think I’m in love..

Shuffled words turned into lyrics..

..can’t fight it either..

Through days and nights of uncertainty..

Unto my dreams it dawdle..

..a love song I suppose,

I commit myself to reunite.

‘finally found my way to deep within..

Of tears and smiles..

Either high or dry…

I’m still in love with music!!!…

-musicfunk-

Author's Note

..be gentle of your reviews...

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Def great metrica and pathos, enjoyed the fact you used anaphora, I haven't seen this amazing figure of speech for a while, and that's def something your lover, music, LOVES to use ! By the way talking about something like music, let me give you a criticism, I promise I won't hurt too much, I'd have enjoyed to see a better sound, try to manage better the acoustic figures of speech (alliteration, onomatopoeia, even anaphoras, that you clearly manage to use perfectly), give more importance to combinations of sounds in words, to the sounds of specific letters in the words and so on ...
Great job, btw ! Loved it =D

[shunik]

;p
thanks

[外人 (Gaijin)]

you're welcome :)

[astronaut]

This sort of reminds me of something Edgar Allan Poe would write lol. But reading a lot of your stuff you have a very unique way of writing that can;t be mimmicked and I can tell you really think about what you will write. :)

[Rhea752]

great job. this was well written and expressed.

[~Lizzy♬]

Oh this is beautiful. I love the way you poured emotion into the poem. Wonderful! :)

~Lizzy~

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I'm never gentle, however well done, it speaks to all of us.

[dukovan]

you have your own way of saying things and I like that a lot.

[Bye Guys]

Love it and love music to. I think the poem is good.

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlande..]

they say the subconscious mind is the bridge to the soul or the unconscious mind...and music def speaks this language which has a purity that few other languages possess
which is why I especially like
"..a love song I suppose,
I commit myself to reunite."
something about how you word that phrase has a lot of power
it has a couple minor grammar errors
but more importantly
it has an interesting, quirky tone

[dukovan]

music is definitely the universal language.

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

def pretty essential, yes

[kc]

why should i be gentle?your poem is not that gentle

[kjsa]

Music is also my kryptonite. Once I get put my headphones on I'm in my own world.