WHY ME

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                     WHY ME?

 

 Why did you choose me out of a million girls?

 

Do you really love me?

 

Am i really your number one?

 

Where ever we go and if we see a girl you flirt with them that makes me debate if you really love me!

 

Thats not love when you figure out what it is tell me?

 

Love is gentle your rough love is calm your not i gave it up to you and know thats all you want thats not really love at all!

 

 

Reviews

[Collect-Eye]

this is really a blog, not a poem
a poem is a re-wording of reality w/ metaphors and/or imagery, not just a summarization in plain English
if it's prose it should have twists and turns
if it's lyrical it should have an angelic quality
etc etc etc...
not asking you to be as abstract as me or anyone else, but give me something that makes me think
and someone can judge me for posting this, but I was sent a friend request w/out being given the courtesy of a review
sometimes criticism is necessary to help someone grow
good poetry doesn't happen over night and it takes a good balance of desire ingenuity and effort
if you wanna help solve your man problems, start w/ yourself
start by empowering yourself and building your self image
ask him if he's really flirting or just being friendly, you'll understand his answer by his emotional state when you ask.
if he turns out to be a d****e, dump him and focus on yourself til someone better comes along.
I could be like most people and placate you and pat your back ,but what's the point.
There's a time to be superficial and a time to speak about reality

[just is]

thought it was sad really. Imagery is well done. Deep and powerful. Your emotions are well presented.

[AlieahRose]

THIS REALLY SPEAKS TO ME...
SO MANY MEMORIES FROM READING THIS...
IT IS RAW...
AND SHOWS PURE TALENT...
WELL DONE MY FRIEND...

[Nina Kari]

I agree with some but its not completly void of emotions. I could feel the emotion and I know the pain. Most women do. Sometimes you can't control the other persons emotions, maybe they didnt love this person at all maybe it was lust. What ever the reason, there is no justified reason for breaking a heart. Nice job with this one, keep it goin! :p

[Goodbye]

I feel your hurt and disappointment in this; this is a very good first effort, and I think with a little structural tweaking, you'll have us eating out of your poetic hands!

[Daethli]

ehh, could have been better, it didnt really make me feel any empathy or sympathy o>O idk which one to chose

[EmpressPoetess]

Well.........I have to agree that this needs structure, but the content is done with real emotion. Nice job

[Alexa Tasch]

how sad. pretty good for a first poem

[♥SunkissAngel♥]

I like it it made me think nice job..

~SK

[tizzy k]

i know

[Brad]

finding lust can be such a slap in the face