Message In A Bottle

Wrote this a while back.

Her identity
burned in the sand,
scorched by the sun-drenched rocks
and washed away in the sea.
I found it in a dull green bottle,
softened by years of violent waves
and sharp scratching shells.
I wonder
If we will ever find the girl;
The conch inside her shell
Who decides to hide herself
In an illusion of home.
Sooner or later,
We'll all need to find the surface
For air.

Reviews

[Samuel Dickens]

My friend roarke said it better than I could, but I'll just add that most anyone craves freedom and independence, especially when they've never had it..

[roarke]

VERY nice. Good handling of archetypes and inner/outer perceptions. Super imagery in a complete simple form.

Well written, good stuff.

[Ms.Bri]

..Excellent poem. So much said in few words. Keep on writing because I look forward to reading more of your work.

[Seanne Tholltree]

like the lines:

If we will ever find the girl;
The conch inside her shell
Who decides to hide herself

[Distant horizons]

uhm, wow! so much said with so little. perfect.thanks for sharing.
ps...this is my first ever 100/100