Like Icarus

The sun does not always bring happiness

I did it

It was an accident

My feathers were lit

And it was all due to this ailment

I followed my foolish thoughts

And my blood's ideas

Thanks to them my writing in ink has tear blots

My body violently cringes

I am like Icarus

A failure and disgrace

Now I have become rigorous

And I did not fall with grace

The most shameful death

And people's feelings toward me are full of scorn

Therefore, as I take my last breath

I am severely forlorn

Reviews

[John C. Chill]

If only the subject had learned something from the tale of Icarus maybe wouldn't have failed, instead only realized amidst the fall. Like Nietzsche so believed, the universe is recurrent and therefore life is a flat circle, and we live only to see ourselves on the same place over and over again. If such a thing is true, the failure of Icarus is to be repeated infinitely through time, and that's freakin' poetic. Thank you for allowing these thoughts through your very interesting poem. Very well done.

[Riley Justine]

Thank you so much!

[Bushra Naqshbandi]

I'm a huge fan of Greek mythology so the title was hugely appealing to me and the contents even more so. An admirable writeup. We all make mistakes, are led to believe by our vanities or whatever that we're right and end up as dismal failures unable to show anyone our faces. But, but, but, THAT is what makes us human. All humans are imperfect and we're none more imperfect than the other. We all have failings but some people's failings are brought into sharper focus than others'. So you might have failed like Icarus but don't feel the guilt of Daedalus. Icarus is remembered as a hero despite his failures and so will you with your potential. :)

[Riley Justine]

Thank you so much! This means a lot and I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem!

[Bushra Naqshbandi]

You're most welcome. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You did very well with the old tale. A lot of great dreams seem impossible. I like the logical thoughts leading to a real ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Riley Justine]

Thanks so much Coyote! Means a lot!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

I really like this one. The rhyming scheme is a bit weird but I think that that's what made it special. I really like your choice of words which portray a sense of self-loathing and worthlessness. Which we all feel sometimes.
really good job here. Stay inspired

[Dannyisawriter]

haha you did a really good job on this one!

[Riley Justine]

Thanks :) The rhyming is a little iffy and is extremely simple but I tried ;)

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

I really like this one. The rhyming scheme is a bit weird but I think that that's what made it special. I really like your choice of words which portray a sense of self-loathing and worthlessness. Which we all feel sometimes.
really good job here. Stay inspired