Hope

The title

A single seed in a dying garden

To jump into a pool of lava trying to hit the only rock

A single ray of sunshine on a cloudy day

For birds to snatch a random worm aiming for one not poisoned

Going towards what could be a ship or shark

Walking blindfolded in the dark

Author's Note

Does this make sense?

Reviews

[747]

Does this make sense? ... Yes. Abstractly, it makes perfect sense. And those last two lines almost sing.

Though you may want to consider changing "To jump into a pool of lava trying to land on the only sidewalk" perhaps to "To jump into a pool of lava trying to hit the only rock" just as it may make more physical sense for a rock to be in a volcano than a sidewalk.

As well, perhaps consider revising "For a bird to pick a random worm trying to get the only one not poisoned" to "For birds to snatch a random worm aiming for one not poisoned" just for better flow.

Not that you would have to use my examples, just something to chew on. Good job.

[Treble]

Thank you! I was actually probably 14 or 15 when I wrote that one, which explains why it doesn't flow or do much good. :D