Refuses to lose

Even when life hurts,

i see no reason to give up,

all the mistakes makes me angry,

and my anger refuses to lose.

Author's Note

1. Grammar corrections are welcome
2. Hard critique are welcome, but no mean comments please
3. Don't give me corrections as changes the entire work.

Reviews

[SquinklaPsyOps]

From this "Even when life hurts, i see no reason to give up," the character in the poem is trying to say that even when is faced with pain refuses to pray.

"all the mistakes makes me angry, and my anger refuses to lose." all the mistakes the character in the poem ignites her and refuses to cool down.

[Tricia Johansson]

Intresting thought. I didn't saw it on that way. But you can alsi turn it to this: if the character never lose against the problems, she would fight forever. And then she must win at least one fight. But to refuse anything, doesn't make you automaticully to a person with too big emotion as needs to calm. No o thought about it on a philosophicully way: mental strength. And well, I can't help that I like to start a poem on one way and give it an unexpected end ;)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

OK, I get it, the character in the poem wins by intentionally losing to get them off her back.

[Tricia Johansson]

Not my point, and not my interpretation, but if that's yours, so fine.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Use the positive waves to travel, let others carry the negatives

[Tricia Johansson]

That's right. But it has nothing to do with the poem.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Stop fighting it and open your eyes

[Tricia Johansson]

I'm not fighting, that's only your interpretation about this. But you don't have to over analyze everything. It's enaugh now.