I love you

Steady now, like needle and thread

Ready now, I've straighened my head

I know that I love you

When you look into my eyes

Seeing whats true

Forgetting all the damn lies

I don't care what's coming

Don't care what's in the past

Because I just want the present

To forever last

Stronger now, with your arms holding me

This is the only place that I need to be

And I'm through with swimming

In waters too deep

Because you're the only one

That I need to keep

Reviews

[Midgy]

Pros:
- Rhymes.
- imagery was nice, good use of similes and metaphors.
- Over-all, pretty well-written.
Cons:
- Cliche title.
- Some grammatical errors seen. There should be commas after certain stanzas. If I were to be reading this aloud, it would be read continuously and without pause.

I really liked the feel of this poem. It actually seems like something I would write. I enjoyed it over-all.

[Jb]

use

[AK]

Very nice....written in simple words but yet very beautifully expresses complex human feelings. And, I think the spelling is 'needle' not 'neadle'.

[Siegfried]

Wonderful poem of love.

Baroque

[Revery]

Consistent stream of thoughts with clean rhymes that fit. I loved the rhyming at the beginning of some of the sentances. Very nice, as I have time I will be reading more of your work.

[Everett DeValle]

Lovely...lovely flow to your wonderful poem...I enjoyed the simplicity yet complex emotions though out your poem.