Wishing

I just want you to look at me

And see the most beautiful face

You've ever seen

But I don't think you even look anymore

I think your eyes just wander past my silouhette

Wander past my shadow

The shadow that I've become to you

I never saw this coming

I never saw this coming

I never saw it coming

When I choked as I said I love you

So scared to utter the words

That I'd never felt before

Volnurable, intolerable

I knew I had it bad

Because such a strong feeling frightened me

Since I knew I'd get hurt in the end

Which is why I know the end is apporaching,

I'm already in so much pain

Scared to have you know me like this

Because I know you;ll just turn away

After you detect the teers running down my face

But I can't help it, becaue I really fetlt

Strongly and I still do

But I just don't think that anythings going to work right

I wish I had the love we had

I wish I still had you

Reviews

[Jb]

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[Lina Grey]

Very intense. There were minor spelling errors, such as "teers" should be "tears" and "fetlt" should be "felt" or "felt it" (whichever you meant you put). However the content was incredible. It was a very emotional and well-written piece. Thank you.

[ATG]

A very sad, but well written poem. It flowed very well and it was interesting. There were a few flaws, but nothing major. Just a few typos and spelling errors and in my opinion, some of them added to the sad tone. Made it seem like someone was upset while writing this. Overall, a very good poem.