I Died in My Dream

a dream

In My Dream

 

In my dream, I lay lifeless and still

a corpse embalmed, six feet’ neath the hill

legs tied, body wrapped like mummies sway

my mouth silenced, unable to cry out or pray

 

I was lowered descending in the dark haze

But I saw your eyes flashing in amazing grace

Tears well up, filling every shaded eyes with drops

But yours stay still, in constant rhythm sighs

 

Each last words, from love ones pleasures my heart

Like chills of frost in autumns mist

Your last word, a doubled edge piercing dart

Penetrating deeply above my wrist

 

Your tears not yours, but a hollow mask

Faint, unreal, tearing life apart

Your tears now covered by a slow hidden smirk

The veil lifted, I could see my blind eyes

 

The pain I felt was beyond every hell made

Its venom unknown, beyond all darkened shade

Just because my heart diverted once

You unleashed the darken burning torrents to haunt

 

But I woke, you were there by my side

Darkness fades, and the light resides

Author's Note

just a dream
feel free

Reviews

[Ayesha Faiz]

This poem is emotional. The imagery is powerful and it pulls the reader into the pain and betrayal felt in the dream. I especially love the twist at the end, it adds depth and leaves a strong impact. Beautifully written and full of feeling.

[Tumi]

Thanks a lot for your warm review😊

[Costa Siwale]

Such a gritty piece, the scene of burial and helplessness, evokes a feeling of eternal suffocation. But the writing’s shift at the end where the speaker awakens to a reality where their 'betrayer' is still present is a brilliant touch! well done.

[Tumi]

Thanks alot for your warm review

[Soren]

A haunting dream with pain and sense of vengeance. It flows well with good meter. Most lovely

[Tumi]

Thanks alot for yah warm review

[Starr]

I see this as a nightmare, one powerful one too,
I like this flow of this write

[Tumi]

Thanks so much, I'm glad you enjoyed reading

[Chris Shaw]

There are some mornings, we are more than grateful to wake up and realize it was all a dream. Enjoyed my visit. Thanks for sharing.

[Pete]

great flow. this keeps the reader on edge until the very end. frightening and telling. your words and imagery evoke the emotions associated with a nightmare such as helplessness and being trapped with no way out despite knowing that you don't want to be there. well done piece of strong writing. bravo.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

it's halloween season and this scary little story is perfect timing!

[John the Baptist]

The experience is cast as a dream, but actually has the flavor of a near death experience. The speaker encounters deceased relatives and is confronted by an indiscretion of years past. There is great relief at discovering it was just a dream, but one wonders if his mind had long desired to make peace with this part of his past.

[Relic]

That's a nightmare I wouldn't want to have. I think there are days when we roll around thoughts in our unconscious that pop up later in our dreams. These could be the result of worries or possibly anger.

Impressive writing here.