I Died in My Dream

a dream

In My Dream

 

In my dream, I lay lifeless and still

a corpse embalmed, six feet’ neath the hill

legs tied, body wrapped like mummies sway

my mouth silenced, unable to cry out or pray

 

I was lowered descending in the dark haze

But I saw your eyes flashing in amazing grace

Tears well up, filling every shaded eyes with drops

But yours stay still, in constant rhythm sighs

 

Each last words, from love ones pleasures my heart

Like chills of frost in autumns mist

Your last word, a doubled edge piercing dart

Penetrating deeply above my wrist

 

Your tears not yours, but a hollow mask

Faint, unreal, tearing life apart

Your tears now covered by a slow hidden smirk

The veil lifted, I could see my blind eyes

 

The pain I felt was beyond every hell made

Its venom unknown, beyond all darkened shade

Just because my heart diverted once

You unleashed the darken burning torrents to haunt

 

But I woke, you were there by my side

Darkness fades, and the light resides

Author's Note

just a dream
feel free

Reviews

[Soren]

A powerful dream cast in powerful words. The short lines emphasize the emotion like panting and the continued reassurance that "you were there" is like a life raft floating close by. Nicely written

[Abida~]

It's so relatable. The horror of the nightmare.
It's an interesting poem to read and how it portrays your fear.

[MrBlack202]

Nice poem, and relatable to many of us.

[red93]

Nice idea, but really needs more work and could be shorter.

[Ken Simm.]

Interesting, relatable and eloquent.

[Thomas W Case]

Wow. Powerful work. Scary.

[Thad]

Very relatable I've
had similar dreams,
a thought provoking
poem! 🤔
Eloquently penned
my friend!
Best regards Thad

[Tumi]

Thanks for the kind review

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Sometimes dreams are so real, even when we wake...
This one brings me to thinking about what people will actually say and feel when we pass...will their words and thoughts be kind? Or will they feel cold and uncaring?
Maybe our spirit will stick around long enough to find out.
j.

[Tumi]

Thanks for the kind review