Journey of Love

Journey of Love

A Poem by Tumi
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Journey of Love

On the winding road of love, we tread softly,
Through shadowy parts, winds howls through the trees
Our gentle feet tremble, but we shake off shortly.


Every bolt that strikes against our love shall freeze
Like lakes below autumn’s chilling haze;
The jolts of affection my heart shall release.


We soar far, beyond the velvet sky haze
Catching the rhythms and blues in ecstasy,
Our eyes entwined in your melodic gaze.


The moon tries to cast its spell jealously,
But we stick as one, against its gloomy façade;
time creeps beneath our very eyes, cautiously.


Our love is a breath that never ceases nor fades,
A soul intertwined until death's sickle claims our breath.
If God so pleases, may we live 'til our final days

© 2024 Tumi


Author's Note

Tumi
feel free, first time trying the TERZA RIMA
critiques are well embraced

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A wonderful poem for love Tumi.
"Our love is a breath that never ceases nor fades,
A soul intertwined until death's sickle claims our breath.
If God so pleases, may we live 'til our final days"
I did like the above words. Would be nice to know. Love could be forever. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry for love.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


Tumi

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot for taking your time to read and give a warm review, it really means a lot
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

I enjoy your work. I am working less. More time to read and write Tumi. You are welcome.
gloomy but beautiful that facade is.

Your imagery keeps getting stronger from poem to poem.
j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Beautiful phrasing, words warm and honest as love should be. Fine form of creating poetry, one of the most natural yet gently precise. 'Our love is a breath that never ceases nor fades,' Many thanks for offering and sharing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


You have beautifully used nature to explain love.This metaphor aptly personifies the intertwined feelings of love. Brilliant words enhances our imagery and we vividly imagine the two souls in love totally immersed. Your words ‘Gentle feet ‘makes me think they are young lovers but the lines’ soul interwined ‘ and ‘deaths sickle claim our lives’ conveys mature love and deep connection. I particularly enjoyed the use of storms and chilling words to represent enduring love in the face of adversities..
thanks for a great share dear Tumi!
Cheers..

Posted 1 Year Ago


Tumi

1 Year Ago

Thanks for the warm review..
I'm glad you enjoyed reading

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Added on October 22, 2024
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Tumi
Tumi

lagos, christian, Nigeria



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