Saved By Sins

Waiting for an absolution

         A remission of my sin

Release me from punishment

        For there is something more within

By no way do I claim

        Nor will I ever, to be a saint

Far from flawless

        Perfect I ain't

All of my mistakes

        My entire aberration

Part of the process

        A live and learn collaboration

Knowledge isn't just  power

        Its strength, to say the least

Ignorance isn't bliss

        Its the belly of the beast

The beast being damnation

       That feeds on the naive

My sins have saved me

       I believe

Reviews

[Astro]

I like it a lot KJ very good rhyme and structure. If I have one suggestion the last line is a bit short. Perhaps, "This I do believe." or...not. As it stands it is very well written and clear as to meaning and gives the reader something to think about, like where we stand. In the belly or out of harm.

[Rommel Martin]

So much clarity and good word usage, some words serious and harsh but you aren't being bitter or a defeatist. This doesn't leave you wondering or leave a trail a thought it gives it out and stabilizes.

[A. H. Pinley]

Took me awhile just to think about how to review your piece. So here's my stab at it. I didn't know what I was doing, my behavior, was destructive and in the end lethal. Thank God I learned from my mistakes and yes able to say that I'm stronger from my short falls.

[Maya]

i love how you indented every other line, it really does a lot for the poem, so far this ones my favorite :) the last two lives are the perfect ending

[Eileenws]

I like the theme of learning from mistakes. The last line is my favorite, my sins have saved me I believe. Nice job. Eileen

[Bane]

Love your vocabulary in this one. Good form, love.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Another intellegent and poinant poem with such clarity of thought

[kublakhan27]

Lots of food for thought in this one...each couplet is it's own snippet of philosophy but they all come together to create a piece of seamless introspection...well done :)

[Trigorin]

Not bad, and the image you've presented with this is very vivid and compelling. The one thing I'd suggest would be to get rid of the indents on every other line, as it doesn't really add much to the story and the poem would be just as powerful presented plainly. Well done.

[Coyote Poetry]

"A live and learn collaboration
Knowledge isn't just power
Its strength, to say the least"
A powerful and interesting poem. I like the way you use sin to make your point. When you test life and take chances. Mistakes will happen. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote