It's All You

I just want you to hold me, I want to feel my body in your arms
I want your embrace to embrace me;
your caress to caress to caress me;
your heart to love me;
your lips to taste me.

I just want you to feel me; the affection
the bond; the energy
Feel the chemistry of us; the connection.

I just want you to know my emotions
know my ins; my outs
I want you to know me.
I want you to know I want you.
I want you to know I need you.
I want you to know I know you; know you know me
and just be.

I just want my imagination.
I want what I ask for in dreams,
in prayers and in thought;
Us.
I want what I've got.

You're so perfect yet can seem ,still, so far.
You keep me wishing for what you are;
What you can be; what I remember;
What I have tasted; what you have shown me.
I want what you have planted in my mind as the way it should be.

I just want it all.
It's all you.

Author's Note

I wrote this as I posted it so it is completely unrevised and unedited. So, we'll see... :)

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ok got the warning. Although I found it difficult to follow the rhyming pattern, this is another tremendously passionate piece with a tinge of desperation. It flows like water off glass until the penultimate stanza:
'You're so perfect yet can seem ,still, so far.
You keep me wishing for what you are;
What you can be; what I remember;
What I have tasted; what you have shown me.
I want what you have planted in my as the way it should be.'
Maybe:
'You're so perfect yet can still seem afar.
You keep me wishing for what you are;
What you can be; what I remember;
What I have tasted; what you have shown me.
I want what you have planted in me as what should be.'

[jinxxnij]

So raw and filled with so much personal emotion. I really liked it. Dont change a thing. It reads almost like a journal entry. Thanks for sharing.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Passionate piece, you expressed the right words in this work. Great job!

[Eileenws]

Very powerful. Nicely done.

[Chris]

it sounds ...real.

[Phoenix]

wow nicely done

[Renée]

there are times songs pop into my head as I read..this is one of those times..giggling .. I kept reading and all I heard was... Toby Keith's - I wanna talk about me

[J. F. Charleston]

It's actually fantastic! Sure wish a girl had said those things to me. Awesome write. Absolutely adore it!

[A. H. Pinley]

Raw emotions for the one you love.

[Jack...]

To me this felt honest. it was charged with emotion and desire. I liked the choppy form as it added to the need and the want and the longing. Like the wirter became out of breath while writing as I did while reading. Very nice KJ

[quinfinn]

awesome write here, Keely. i felt every line in the depths of my passionate soul. well done!