Leave Me Alone

This was the first poem I ever wrote. I was 16 years old. I knew nothing about Love.

You've burdened me with heartache
You've always come and go
There is nothing left for you to take
but the pain you've caused to grow
I've lost desire to find you
I'm better off on my own
I don't need what you put me through
So, Love leave me alone

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

An excellent write for a sixteen year old!!!
Worth updating perhaps?
You've burdened me with heartache
You always come and go
There is nothing left for you to take
but the pain you've caused to grow
I've lost desire to find you
I'm better on my own
I need not what you put me through
So, Love leave me alone

[jinxxnij]

Pretty deep for 16. Considering you probably didnt even know what love was, I'd say you had quite an accurate premonition. LOL
Nice one.

[Eileenws]

Good job of getting your point across. I like the brevity.

[larryb]

Hell of a poem for 16 and ive never seen a poem veiwed that many times in one day ...good going :)

[Chris]

good luck...

[emmajoy]

What fine meter and word flow. I'm amazed at your ability and please dont think me condescending but there are others in here who dont have your finesse. Brava

[Phoenix]

wow such pain

[kublakhan27]

I think I was seventeen when I wrote my first one so I must have been a late bloomer haha My theme was the same as yours though...I'd bet that heartache has inspired more people to become poets than any other theme...this is great and still very much relevant to your style :)

[J. F. Charleston]

It was pretty good! Short yes, but really good!

[Pete Langley]

This much better, Keely. It`s a completely rounded piece with a firm conclusion. One tiny adjustment makes the scan perfect - you don`t need "off" in the 6th line. Well done. P.