Dusty Feathers

I took a flight within myself tonight; a glide of introspection
Ask a broken bird "why the cage?'
Will he reply, "For my protection"?

I put myself inside a lie
to save me from myself

Not one dream have I gone after; not one star have I claimed

Covered in doubt, I never open my arms; never welcome an efforts wings

Like broken bones I crumble; expected to carry my weight
Nothing is heavier than the fear of falling; catching yourself too late

Nothing good will ever come of me
if I leave a dusty feather to fly
Even those that fall so gracefully
reach the ground before the sky

I have fallen.

Author's Note

Please take a moment to comment, reviews are always helpful. Especially when I'm experimenting with different styles. I thank you in advance, it truly means so much.

Reviews

[quinfinn]

depths of despair. succinctly placed into lovely verse. ironic, isn't it? i always love this type of write. the duality of humanity is my favorite oxy moron.....we are singular minded and doomed to fail unless we are singular minded and determined to win. excellent poem!

[Coyote Poetry]

"I put myself inside a lie
to save me from myself"
The above line is true. We can twist us up and leave us with the truth lost. I like the complete poem. We will fall many times. We must rise wiser and stronger. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Dana Alsamsam]

"I put myself inside a lie
to save me from myself"

these words were poignant and real! going after dreams is such a risk because so often there is rejection and falling before we can climb back to the top. i personally relate to this piece because i've always felt caged by my parents. even if i did want to pursue a dream, they refuse to allow engaging in non-academic areas. here's to hoping you and all the dreamers break out of the cage!

[TL Boehm]

eloquent and sad. Yes the cage is protection for a flightless broken bird, indeed. I found the style solid and strong.

[gombeggar]

reads very well...should be done publicly, me thinks

[jinxxnij]

This is by far my all time favorite....so far. F*****g awesome sauce! I am such a fan!!!

[Astro]

One cannot rise like the phoenix in all her glory until they have hit rock bottom first. Only after you know the feel of being earthbound can you really ever appreciate what it is to fly. Thought provoking piece KJ

[SyberRose]

Nicely done indeed...Rose

[s y e]

This was amazingly well written, an excellent write, well done.

~ Sye

[Ency Bearis]

Beautiful poem and nicely written

[Baby Ricochet]

The introspection protection rhyme vaguely reminds me of rap. Interesting format