What's Left

You broke my heart into more pieces than it was made of...
Shattered baggage

Reviews

[Writer *78*]

Powerful, emotional, deep. I tell you who so ever has hurt you that badly doesnt know how much you cared for him. Its funny how the one whove been waiting for comes into your life as mine did, but I still love her without a doubt. if I could I would proclaim it to the world. Well done.

[jinxxnij]

Awesome. Love love love love

[Jonathan Biswell]

a few simple words but so much more

[Elle Thompson]

I'm pretty sure everyone has written something on this subject and titled it "What's Left". I would challenge you to find a new way to express your feelings. Pain can make extraordinary art if it is unique and personal.

[Nicky Sarti]

That's going on my favourites list right away!

[MoriartyMesa]

A softer kick to the nuts I have yet to see.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Love it. Simple but effective with feelings.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Simple, yet powerful. I can relate to the emotion. Personally, I would like to see it written:

You broke my heart into more pieces
than it was made of--
Shattered baggage

But that's just my own little take on form--it's sort of a stylized and modernized Haiku (could be a classic Senryu if you worked on the syllabic count a little). Overall, it made an impression on me, so that's a good thing.

[Frieda P]

Wow, how did you do that in so few words. Kudos.

[Rita L. Sev]

Simple and raw - good job!