Love Milk

Like the first taste of mothers milk,
I crave
You've breast fed my soul;
nurtured my famished heart

This infant love;
 passion child
Let it suckle,
So it can grow

Your love does my body good

Reviews

[Elle Thompson]

I can see where using milk as a metaphor for love seems like a good idea, I think as a concept it has a lot of potential. However, I simply cannot take this piece seriously after the line "You've breast fed my soul". Personally I would have been a little more abstract with my treatment of this subject, say what you mean without saying it.

[Mr Dunne Poetry]

Very interesting metaphor indeed ;) thanks for sharing KJ

[Pete Langley]

This is a basic truth, told well, Keely. P.

[Veronica Chandler]

Love as a metaphor for sustenance...Brilliant and delightful write.

[kublakhan27]

A wonderful ode to motherhood...I always felt there was something ritualistic about a baby's first taste of mother's milk, and you've captured that feeling vividly for me here...well done Keely :)

[J. F. Charleston]

It's good... kinda have a little trouble understanding the reason, but who needs one anyway with poetry. I've read some that doesn't even have a certain point, but they were great. Good write, as always.

[Shivam Murari]

so metaphorically morphological :) Makes me think :)

[John F Carver]

Very interesting metaphor.

[Renée]

nurturing a new love...love must be nurtured to grow... nice work Keely J

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

:) Your love does my body good--nice play on words concerning the title.

A short poem, simple and yet intriguing enough to be read and re-read; mulled over as a metaphor for deeper things. As children we hang on to things that mean something to us, as we grow older, the letting go seems to get easier in some respects and harder in some respects. I liked this write. Nicely done.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. I like the way you used the topic. Breast feeding does bring a closeness rarely touched again in a life. I like the verses in the poem. Allowed the reader to ponder thoughts and create a good vision. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote