Love Milk

Like the first taste of mothers milk,
I crave
You've breast fed my soul;
nurtured my famished heart

This infant love;
 passion child
Let it suckle,
So it can grow

Your love does my body good

Reviews

[Elle Thompson]

I can see where using milk as a metaphor for love seems like a good idea, I think as a concept it has a lot of potential. However, I simply cannot take this piece seriously after the line "You've breast fed my soul". Personally I would have been a little more abstract with my treatment of this subject, say what you mean without saying it.

[quinfinn]

excellent metaphor.....and very glad that's what it is indeed, for mothers milk tastes absolutely awful....very clever write, Keely Jane

[Baby Ricochet]

Beautiful little poem. Short and sweet. Nice

[Rita L. Sev]

This is really an interesting metaphor. So true that this is what love can feel like, makes us helpless like an infant and leaves us craving to be nourished by our beloved. One to ponder - great piece!

[Jack...]

Beautiful, KJ, short and sweet and beautiful

[ChemicalMadness]

This is light, but not light...it's hopeful and a bit yearning, I believe. At the same time playful....hopeful, yearning, playful....new love indeed. The metaphor may be a little uncomfortable, but I understand your choices and the 2nd (stanza) eases the quizzical aftertaste of the first. Nicely done KJ.

CM.

[Robin]

Sweet and very loving. Great job!

[Frieda P]

Oddly intriguing metaphor Keely, well done you. Like this succinct little statement.

[Souladareatease]

Very refined mind...excellent work in writ!!!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Lovely gentle use of metaphor in a short and well constructed piece Keely

[Lover Of Words]

Interesting piece very good