Breath of Death

I exhaled a piece of me when I let you go,
my heart be my breath

I gasped for your love,
I breathed it to death

I inhale the cold and emptiness,
fill my lungs in chest

The air of goodbye,
suffocate this love for the best

Reviews

[Perkele.7885]

A raw exchange of letting love go for the suffocation of emptiness! No one can understand the feeling until they live it. WTG, KeelyJane

[ANTO]

Letting go = the hardest thing = the greatest testament of love for another. You smashed it here KJ. Emotional work.

[KurKota]

Very descriptive, and impacts the reader. Very nice writing.

[Yasmin]

This is heartbreaking and so sad! But that doesn't mean that it's not good :P
Well done

[Vidya Bacchus]

lovely writing .Heart break is b***h lol but we survive

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Nice little write, I like these parts:
"I exhaled a piece of me when I let you go,"

"I gasped for your love,
I breathed it to death"

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

Not a while ago, I breathed "The breath of death"
I know this feeling.

[Claire Bear]

These words describe the truth of real heartbreak. Beautiful!

[gombeggar]

very good words indeed...i'd drop the commas they only take away from yer words here...I think

[Inda]

Fantastic! every line is like a punch to the face and the last to the groin! In all seriousness though, very powerful stuff, well penned. :)