wasted

i love this one..just popped out of my mind..i dont even understand it..lol

the remnants of couldve beens
the debris of things unseen
held together by drifters of life
bonded by boundaries of might

the depth of touch lingered
the solitude wanders sluggishly
vows shouted but no one heard
silent tears wept took over

unspoken words shattered by lies
incredulous pain became imbecile
tremor soul surveyed the wind
the page of smile was torn

nostalgic memoirs created animosity
the light that burnt became wanton desires
its supposed to be a beautiful ballad
now itys nothing but wasted words

Reviews

[Robin]

I am impressed with your style and your sub-conscious expression of this feeling you caught the mood and sung the low harmony of hindsight . well done

[JC]

i dig your flow and words that you can almost chew, very stream of consciousness and i believe a lot of truth is in the subconscious...i like it.

[Joshua Donahue]

very nice. very wordy which keeps it from being very simple and direct, and i like that in a poem. :D

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

a strong and fearless exploration of a circumstance begun on a the sheen of a beautiful pearl and ended at the tarnished tip of pain~

[Dream Weaver]

This poem was everything but wasted..
A strong solid feel. as words could mean
so little and yet, they say everything.
this is a excellent write....

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

Beautiful. I luv it when i see you use such powerful words to adorn u'r poem. This is great!

[Cassiopia Summers]

This is a good poem. I like it, (:

[HorrorMaster]

very good poem of yours

[Iota]

I don't know if the words were wasted they are just out of time now. When first written they were perfect but after the lies they no longer apply but never were they wasted. Words live forever they just represent that small period of time and not eternity. Excellent write.