when im with you

nahh...hmmn..i dunno..i did'nt wrote this...lol..my 9 year old cousin did..she begged me to pose it...

a walk in the rain
 a run in the forest
holding hands in the sand
handing the world in your palm

a thunder in the dessert
a tear in your smile
reaching the moon
seeing love in your eyes

your'e amazing
you are my whole world
i want to be with you
and make you mine forever

Reviews

[Frank F. Atanacio]

a stand alone poem meaning it's strength can stand alone I loved it!!!

[Revolved]

This is so wonderful!!! I love the second stanza. Wonderful poetry!

[Sonali]

nice contrasting words--
a thunder in the dessert
a tear in your smile
The love of a 9 yr old--so cute.

[lavina k.]

A future poet.
Great!!!
Tell him that his mind in innovative and sweet.
And wish him good luck for his future.

[Emily B]

your cousin did a wonderful job, a born poet I would say

[Randolf Ramos]

this is true friendship, Nice poem!

[Neisha Ann]

A 9 year old? Wow, she's pretty good!

[Sports Girl]

Wow good poem. That is a talented 9 year old

[Andrew Wright]

Lol, at nine you may have better shot with love than most... great piece!

[ShaneBerry]

stunning, just as candylove said! i feel the same way about a close friend of mine lol this poem i could relate to!