Self Doubt or Evolutions 3

How I write. This is an Evolution poem. The other two aren't posted here anymore but maybe I'll put them up. This is my poetic voice and the voice in my head.

September 12, 2009 / 1:27 am

So the time has come
To write anew

scratch that, start again, what year is this, 1540?

So the time has come to
Write something new
And here I am just Val

scratch that, that's horrible

Time

oh Val, get off the time kick

I spent exactly thirty-seven
Minutes this morning reading
Celebrity news. Exactly one
Getting dressed.

is this something you want in a poem? and you're still talking about time...

A desk lady at the library
Is having the time of her
Life, laughing it up when a
Man asks if it costs anything
To check a book out. I
Want to give her a swirlie.

I give up, Val. Do you even remember how to do this?

 

 

 

Author's Note

I am past constructive criticism. I don't allow myself to take it in the way it was given. Just tell me if you read it and if it totally sucked. I don't need to know why.

Reviews

[cest la vie]

Who can criticize your process?
this is so damn witty, sharp, honest
I really like this piece.

[PhantomDancer]

Actually, it made me laugh. Whether or not you intended to be funny, you succeeded well.

[caliban]

i read it and it did not totally suck.

[BjH]

I love your third person
you use it when needed
and it works
"I give up, Val. Do you even remember how to do this? "
is it someone you know?
is it you?
both?
either way and anyway it works
cheers'm'dears