A frozen moment

Our passionate and evolving love is like;

A frozen moment in a frozen world, filled with shining icicles;

White strawberries rising from magical, fertile landscapes;

Developing themselves into delicious, lovable and complete organic beings;

Representing the warm and strong feeling you give me, indescribable ;

You’re as beautiful as the sun,  rising far away in an unknown world ;

however you enlighten me with your golden glow.

Reviews

[Amanda Naomi]

You poem starts out with an outright contradiction... evolving love being a frozen moment...and the poem in turn evolves! very unique...
its like after the first line you are describing the evolution of first said love, but it took me a while to get that
good write....i like it when they make me think!

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

The imagery and emotion is very beautiful. I love the picture you paint with your words in this poem. It's also very deep and it shows that you have dug deep. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Vicky Zhuang Yi-Yin]

The imagery, the emotion and the context went hand in hand in hand. This was really good. Keep writing!
-Yin

[Poetry Girl]

this is really good. i likd this part : "you're as beautiful as he sun" thats such a great way of telling some one how beatiful they really look. love this!

[Senseless whatever]

Good strong emotional write. Vivid imagery.

[KL]

Don't mean to be picky, but is there some sort of symbolic meaning behind the semi-colons? Because otherwise they don't belong there. :P This poem would have incredible flow without them, but that's only if you don't actually need them.

Other than that, outstanding. The imagery is so clear that I can see the painting in my head. 'White strawberries rising from magical, fertile landscapes' is my favourite line... going from the neutrality of white to a loving red can indeed be a magical thing that only fertile landscapes can provide. Beautiful, man.

[Caitlynxoxo]

Your writing never disappoints :) when i read this, i get a clear picture of what you are trying to say, and....wow...just amazing.

xoxoCaitlynxoxo

[Atheana Kylee-S. C.]

Sweeet poem :')
Very good poem :)

[Lovely Lady]

ummmmmhhhh... some moments are worth freezing... you made me pause and want to freeze myself with this poem.
~♥~

[Moonflower]

This is very imaginitive and lovely~ took me to enchanting places, I enjoy your interpretation of love and beauty. Wonderful write, dear.